Read, Rate & Review~Thursday, June 11th!

Welcome to TwiSlash Unveiled
Thank you for joining us for our Thursday Read, Rate and Review.

As you know, today is the day that we will be introducing you to a little known piece of fanfiction and giving you our opinions on the selection. This week's selection drew mixed reviews from the Major's Southern Belles and Yankee Lady, so let us know what you think of...

Unwrapped
by ECullenitis

Cella says...

Bella’s change has taken place in fan fiction in so many different ways it’s impossible to keep count. Sometimes the Cullen family plans out her change, other times it’s on the verge of death.

Unwrapped has to be one of the more provocative and erotic ways that Bella is turned from a human into a vampire. In this unique one-shot, drinking blood quickly turns the vamps into lust driven fiends.

We find out early on that Edward isn’t the only member of the family that craves the sweet nectar of Bella’s life, and a hesitant Edward wants to ask his Bella to not only share her blood with the rest of his family, but her body as well.

That’s right, no longer a prude Edward seems to have a thing for poly relationships, and wants the whole family to join in. Bella is hesitant to agree until Edward uses a vampire gift more powerful than dazzling to convince her to share herself.

This naughty tale tempts you with only hints of fem slash as Bella and Alice share a hot steamy kiss, and Rose allows Emmett to lick Bella’s Juices off of her own fingers. Although none of the guys enjoy each other sexually, they are definitely not opposed to sharing.

This story is well written and has Bella getting kissed, licked, touched, and fucked by all but one Cullen family member. For all those reasons and one more, I give this story the highest rating possible, and say go grab the towel.

What’s the one more you ask?

That’s easy, Jasper fucking Bella while Edward watches is always a win in my book.

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Whitlock's Girl thinks...

I was very leary of reviewing this story. It doesn't include slash of any sort, but it does include a lot of sex, that, to some, would be considered deviant. Normally, sex of any sort is a turn on for me. Well, unless it is a story of incest or rape, of course, but there's just something about this story that makes me squeamish. Don't get me wrong, the sex is well written and if you are looking for a long one shot full of sex, then look no farther, cause this will do. However, if you are looking for a story or even a one shot that is realistic and has a good plot, close the browser and go back to square one, because, in my opinion, this just isn't it.

The characters, while hot, are so OOC that for me it really throws the story off-kilter and into some weird alter ego fantasy realm that does nothing for me. What turned me off the most was Edward's request of, the still a virgin, Bella, but it's followed closely by Edward sharing Bella with father figure Carlisle just moments after deflowering our favorite virgin.

I do have to agree with Cella, that Jasper fucking Bella, while Edward watches is always hot. So, that's why this Southern Belle gives Unwrapped 2 for story and a 3 for sex.

So, depending on what you're looking for, your towel may or may not be needed, but I'll leave that up to you to decide.

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Rosella's take...

We are bringing the holidays back with this one-shot as all Bella wants for Christmas is to become immortal. Edward not only agrees, but also has some ideas of his own. *wiggles eyebrows* His suggestion is to allow each family member, minus Esme, a taste of Bella’s sweet blood & body. His persuasive powers guide her into making a decision that makes this story different from most. As you will see, Bella experiences her change while under the influence of intense feelings of arousal, lust and passion. Mmm, yummy!

It all starts off with Edward making love to Bella for the first time. And the way this lemon is described is enough to get the juices flowing and the fingers roaming. *smirks* Jasper is second in line, and requests a certain position, which Bella quite enjoys, even as both Edward & Alice watch from the sidelines. Bella never takes her mind off her true love, Edward, and feeds off the passion, lust and love she feels for him to make herself a better lover for the others. Rose & Em are next for the tasting, and taste is exactly what they do. By now, Bella has had several orgasms, and Emmett’s fingers have no problem bringing forth another.

Bella is under the impression that this is all cuming to an end; that is until Carlisle makes it known that he would like to bring her pleasure with a little anal stimulation. Edward joins this two-way making the final peaking moments that much better. *panting & throbbing* Gawd, I love polyslash! Now that each Cullen has tasted her, she begins her change burning with not only the pain, but the lingering bliss that follows so many mind-blowing orgasms.

If I had the chance to turn into a vampire, this is the way I’d want to do it. I might make a few adjustments to meet my own personal Jasper obsession needs, but overall this is one hell of an erotic way to be changed. I give it a sizzle scale rating of 4, which means get nekkid & finger happy. So grab your towel and make sure the door is locked because you will most definitely find yourself in quite the compromising situation.

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The Master's thoughts...

When the one-shot “Unwrapped” by ECullenitis was first suggested as our next review story choice, I admit to being a wee big squeamish when I heard the term ‘orgy’ describe the, ah, plot. I know, I know, I can handle guy on guy slash and the occasional threesome but not group sex? This is indeed true. I seem to have acquired an irrational jealous streak when it comes to sharing the boys or Bella, therefore, the words “Cullen orgy” sent me into a tailspin. I was pleasantly surprised to find that ‘orgy’ did not necessarily describe “Unwrapped”, a story revolving around Edward submitting to Bella’s desire to be turned into a vampire as a Christmas present to her. However, this acquiesce does not come without a request from Edward and …the rest of the Cullens. Since becoming vegetarians and denying themselves what they desire most, the Cullens have learned to quench their thirst for human blood. Yet, being around Bella daily has left them all yearning for something they have fought hard to forget. Alice has seen a vision of Bella enjoying herself physically with each of them, so Edward uses his dazzling powers on Bella to help with her insecurities and indecisiveness over being intimate, in more ways than one, with the Cullen family.

The Cullens have all requested to be included on Bella’s change, each wanting a taste of her strawberry and freesia scented blood for their own. In turn, they have offered to aide Edward in putting her into such a state of ecstasy that burning pain of the venom will be delayed. Edward, of course, is the first Cullen to be with Bella, taking her sweetly for her first time as they make love on a bed, with the remaining Cullens nearby in another room. Their lovemaking is sweet, tender and full of love. But Bella doesn’t have long to rest after, as Jasper is waiting to get some release from all the built up sexual desire in the household he has been tortured with, while Alice intends to watch and pleasure herself. Anyone who knows me, knows that I ship Jasper and Bella, therefore, I admit to this being my favorite part of the story, and Edward observing from the head of the bed made it even more erotic. Emmett, Rosalie, and even Carlise all have an enjoyable time with Bella prior to her change.

Each Cullen has a taste of Bella, drinking her briefly before sealing the wounds with their venom. True to their word, Bella is on such a high from multiple orgasms, that the change begins with a tingly feeling, rather than an excruciating burn. While this story surprised me with some of the sweet moments between Bella and Edward, I was turned off by the idea of Bella and Carlise together. I see Carlise as a father figure to Bella and their having sex was a bit incestuous to me. Brothers I can handle, fathers I cannot. Also, Edward seemed so out of character here, I had hard time imagining him agreeing to such risky and deviant behavior. I can handle OOC Edward, but this story begins canon-like, with Edward and Bella deeply in love. His sharing her, in any manner, does not seem like something Edward would do, regardless of his family ties or their call for her blood. Although, that being said, the way the entire story was written intelligent and sexy. Sure, the fuck word was used, along with some grunting and groaning, but each coupling was unique and the Cullens finally satisfying some long denied bloodlust was very concupiscent.

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So, there you have it. Our take on Unwrapped by ECullenitis. We know that with such mixed reviews that it may be hard for you to decide on whether this story is worth your time, but for hopefully our reviews will help you make that decision.

As a collective, Major Whitlock's Southern Belles and Yankee Lady give Unwrapped an average rating of 4 on the sizzle chart. So, get nekkid and finger happy, then come on back and let us know what you thought.

Also, there's a thread for TwiSlash Unveiled over at Twilighted. Cum join in the fun through the entire week.

Read, Rate & Review~Thursday, June 4th!

Welcome once again to TwiSlash Unveiled.
We are so pleased you could join us.

Today is Thursday and as you know, Thursdays are the day that we take a piece of TwiSlash and Read, Rate and Review it,giving you, the reader, our opinions on what makes or breaks the story. This week's story tops the charts. So, without further ado, we present to you...

The Mistress, the Headmaster and the Shrink
by DefinatelyStaying

Master Jasper's thoughts...

Sagging in bonds has never been as hot as it was when we are first introduced to “The Mistress” chapter of “The Mistress, the Headmaster and the Shrink”. The first paragraph has us gasping right along with Edward as he tries in vain to hold off his impending orgasm. We are treated to whimpers of frustration, groans of sensation and animalistic cries of orgasms from Edward, Jasper and Bella. While the “Mistress” obviously refers to Bella, we are told the story from Edward’s submissive point of view. Mistress Bella put her submissives through their paces in serving her. Edward’s and Jasper only concern was their Mistress’s pleasure; and a bit of a friendly competition between the boys ensues. Whose name will she scream as she comes? Edward, Jasper or both? This chapter was just the first of three role playing chapters exploring the fantasies of this horny threesome.

“The Headmaster” is told from innocent, or not so innocent, Bella’s point of view. After being caught fornicating on school grounds, Edward and Bella are sent to the Headmaster’s office for some, ah, shall we say, punishment. We see Edward’s cockiness in his ability to pleasure his girlfriend turned on him when Headmaster Whitlock questions this very ability. It is up to Headmaster Whitlock to teach Edward the finer points of bringing his girlfriend to the ultimate orgasm orally, which the Headmaster does with ‘mastered’ skill. Mr. Whitlock, and all his experience, ends up teaching his students a little more than expected, but it is a certainly welcomed lesson by his eager and sexually aroused pupils. Before “The Headmaster” being sent to the principal’s office never looked so good.

Dr. Cullen is determined to get to the bottom-in more ways than one- of the sexually repressed Jasper and Bella in “The Shrink”, the third, and last, installment in this three part series. I fully admit to this being one of my favorite Jasper/Bella/Edward lemons I have ever read. Not only is it told from my darlin’ Jasper’s point of view, but it holds a very special place in my heart. Jasper thinks he is uncomfortable just talking about their sex life? Well, wait until Dr. Cullen suggests that Jasper pleasure himself while Bella observes. As you will come to find out in future reviews, Jasper masturbating is my single favorite smut activity, so needless to say, I found this particular exercise in sex therapy quite entertaining. When Dr. Cullen asks Bella if it would arouse her to watch Jasper masturbate, I answered with a resounding YES! What starts out in an exploration of sexual desires ends up being one of the hottest threesomes written. Dr. Cullen proves he can certainly take care of anyone’s sexually frustrated needs.

While DefinatelyStaying uses The Mistress, the Headmaster and the Shrink to show us that role playing can be a thrilling experience, it is the small moments – the gentle caresses, the soft kisses, the looks of love – that make Edward, Bella, and Jasper a loving and realistic partnership. If you do not feel the need to dust off the old naughty nurse uniform after finishing this trilogy, you have not given it enough attention.

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Whitlock's Girl's says...

I knew within just a few words that I was going to love this story. At the very beginning of the first chapter, DefinatelyStaying has Edward balanced precariously on the edge of passion's cliff. DS writes this balancing act to such perfection that you are instantly drawn in. The juices start flowing from the first “Oh God” to the last. Jasper and Edward do everything asked of them by Mistress Bella and they do it precisely and perfectly and oh so tantalizingly delicious. Their only desire is to please her and oh boy, do they please her(me too, if I'm honest) and they continue to do so throughout this trilogy of one shots.

I, for one, would have loved to trade places with her, as she Jasper satisfied her on his desk or as she was watching Edward and Jasper masturbate. I'm sure you'll want to trade places with Bella as well, once you give The Mistress, the Headmaster and the Shrink a read, but alas we're relegated to being a voyeurs, but thanks to DS's marvelous talents with a “pen”, the voyeur is kept quite happy.

Stock up on the batteries and the towels, because this story, like all DefinatelyStaying's stories are FUCKHOT AWESOME! Hell, you might want to call the insurance guy and up the flood insurance because this one is going to open the flood gates.

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Rosella Whitlock's take...

Reading this story was like having all my dreams come true; a fantasy put into words. Why? Because personally, Jasper, Bella & Edward are my favorite pairing and the role-playing portrayed in each chapter is erotically satisfying in every way. Who wouldn’t want to be sandwiched in between those men while they pleasured you and each other? *shivers* Yes, please!

DS does a fabulous job of making sure you’re hooked from the first sentence. Starting off in Edward’s point of view, we get to see firsthand how difficult it is to hold back an “impending, no imminent orgasm.” Especially when you find out why and who is responsible for his imminent release. *wiggles eyebrows* Mistress Bella has both men wrapped around her little finger, as both are eager to do anything she pleases. Knowing Edward’s possessive thoughts and his struggle to obey his Mistress makes you tingle and throb in places you didn’t even know existed.
The second chapter is absolutely delicious because we get to see Headmaster Jasper in action. It’s no secret Jasper is my favorite character, and when he takes control and uses his mastered skills as a man who knows his way down south I cum completely undone. DS puts us in his world through Bella’s point of view and allows us to imagine Jasper’s head between our legs as his tongue and fingers dance around our lady parts. If that doesn’t get your juices flowing then having Jasper take charge and demand that Edward give him pleasure surely will. This is my favorite chapter of the three, although each has its own compelling style.

The intensity of lust and passion continues with Dr. Cullen taking charge and getting both Bella & Jasper to confront their sexual insecurities and fantasies. This is by far one of the hottest threesomes and the last sexual position is very sensually stimulating. By the end, you are left in such an intense state of arousal that if you haven’t already broken your toy or soaked your towel, you will!

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Cella Cullen's POV...

Although this particular writer is well known for her controversial story “The Forbidden Room.” It is one of her newest creations that what we are bringing to light today.

After bidding $800 at the Support Stacie auction, BlueEyes32 requested a smut filled story from one of my favorite mistresses.

Although, the story is already known to DefinatelyStaying’s followers of the aforementioned story it is relatively unknown to the rest of the slash loving readers. After working hard to invest both time and batteries into investigating this story further I can honestly say that it is grade A slash material.

A nice romantic tale about a couple spicing up their love life with a little romantic role play is sweet, but DefinatelyStaying has never been known for writing sweet stories. On the contrary, she is known for shocking her readers with twists and spins you would never see coming. This story is no different, putting her own spin on the traditional role play scenarios DefinatelyStaying has caused many wet panties with her short story “The Mistress, The Headmaster, and The Shrink”.

This slash filled three chapter story is not based around the typical happily married couple, but instead involves the poly monogamous relationship of Edward, Bella & Jasper. That’s right, all my personal favorites lined up in a nice little sexual row.

Place a cherry on top and you’re in my own personal heaven.

This unorthodox triad is happily together in a permanent relationship that is unknown to the outside world. Of course, there is no drama discussed in this story, no, it is purely one big juicy lemon for fun and pleasure.

This story is about their sex lives, and of course, who wouldn’t want to know more about that? The trio is very sexually active and we get to come along for the ride and see how they spice up their sex lives. Taking turns as they play out each other’s fantasies week after week, sound familiar?

That’s probably because DefinatelyStaying is also known for her story without a plot, “Next Weekend.” Next Weekend is a smut for smut sakes tale about Edward and his wife Bella who decide to explore each other's sexual fantasies each weekend. They go as far as involving their neighbors and close friends. As the fantasies grow so does the drama.

The Mistress, the Headmaster and the Shrink though, has this fun-loving threesome only participating in role play, and I can put all minds at ease by stating that there are no blue eyed babies or crazy stalker neighbors involved in this tale.

The best part about this role play story is how they truly get into the mindsets of their characters. You will not have to worry about the thoughts of the person you are reading from breaking away from the role they are playing and ruining the illusion, instead you have to worry about whether you might start to believe it’s really happening.

This story will truly capture your attention from the very first paragraph in which Edward is already on the brink of a massive orgasm, and keep you dripping until the very end. Don’t feel bad when your screaming for more, because trust me, you’re not alone.

So, after much research and a lot of enjoyment I can easily declare that “The Mistress, The Headmaster, and The Shrink” tops our sizzle chart and you should run not walk to read this provocative tale.

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IT'S UNANIMOUS! Major Whitlock's Southern Belles and Yankee Lady of TwiSlash Unveiled think "The Mistress, the Headmaster and the Shrink" is FUCKAWESOME and deserving of top honors in the the TU Sizzle Chart, 5 Sparkling Peens! Grab those extra batteries and a SUPER absorbent towel or two, because you are DEFINATELY going to need them. STAYING dry isn't an option!

Who is behind the scenes at TwiSlash Unveiled?

Hello all! As you've read, TwiSlash Unveiled was formed by four slash lovin' Jasper fans, and we are, collectively, Major Whitlock's Southern Belles and Yankee Lady. Who are we individually, you ask? Well, Whitlock's Girl is here to introduce you to the ladies in charge!

The Southern Belles are none other than...

Cella Cullen is the author of the awesomeness that is Raising Bella and Supernova. She and I became buds thanks to a prudish, homophobe teen boy that was trying to roleplay our favorite guy at Bittersweet Forever. *shudders* I'll forever be grateful for her recommending me to play Jasper at BSF, because it's made me grow as an author and for trusting me enough to help her with a fight scene in Raising Bella. It was so sweet and due to her recommendation at the end of that chapter my hits and visitors jumped dramatically!

Rosella Cullen/Whitlock, yes she's jumped ship and joined Team Jasper, love her pervy little heart. Rosella writes the fabulousness that is Make You Feel My Love, which is seriously fucking HOT! Although she would tell you it needs work, hence the reason she is revamping it. She's also the author of Conflicted Soldier, which is a J/B smutty one-shot with an actual plot line and potential to make it as a full on story. Both stories are AU, with vamps all the way.

Whitlock's Girl aka DZmom, yep that's me! I've only been around for a few months, but I'm loving every minute of it! I started out an entirely canon, pure fluff, All-Vamp girl and now I'm fully entrenched in an AU/AH Jasper and Bella story called Desperation and co-authoring this blog dedicated to TwiSlash. Go figure, but I wouldn't trade it for the world because it brought me to these lovely ladies and Jasper. He was seriously neglected in the books and to me, he and Carlisle have the most interesting histories of the Cullen Clan. My favorite pairings are J/B, of course, J/E or J/B/E, but only if there is slash and a non-competing J/E. LOL! I'm a picky bitch, aren't I?

and his Yankee Lady is...

Master Jasper aka Touchstone, she's a J/B and J/E shipper and one fucktabulous graphic artist. Her work is some of the absolute best I've ever seen. She's pure fucking win and if it weren't for her and her fabulous artwork, I don't think my story and the stories of many others would be as popular as they are! She's done banners for not only myself, but also AngstGoddess, Starfish422 and The Lazy, Yet Discerning Ficster. Her artwork is thoughtful and distinctive and absolutely beautiful. You can find her portfolio of artwork at Touchstone Art.

DefinatelyStaying, she's a whatever shipper really but prefers E/J (or J/B) and has no extraordinary talents whatsoever. She writes some of the most graphic lemons on FanFiction, and has some interesting content posted on her story blogs. Anyone up for a few boy porn videos?

So, there you have it. The crazy crew that is behind this blog. May you come to know and love us all and our work here! Oh and come join us on the TwiSlash Unveiled thread at Twilighted.